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 Post subject: Re: M:EM High School
PostPosted: Mon Apr 30, 2018 10:11 pm 
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I don't want to exaggerate, but this is the best thing in the history of history.

I know, right? I have such great ideas.

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:D

Relatedly, it's also a tradition at most colleges to try to schedule a cupcake opponent for the homecoming game, because the returning alumni want to watch their team win, and the administration wants the alumni happy. :)

Mmmmm. Cupcakes...


Tryst - Horny Kid (sorry...)

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I'm sorry...kind of...


“Hmm,” Aloise said, considering. “Well, maybe Beryl and I can crash their Prom so we can hang out with you there.”

OH MY GOD I WANT TO WRITE THIS STORY.

Things get interesting when they're all dancing to "Hungry Like the Wolf."


Suddenly, a loud explosion shook the school, almost knocking them off their feet.

Aloise curled up her face in a sort of grimace. “Chemistry?”

The only problem here is that Aloise would be in that class, too, because we know that she and Beryl have Chemistry together.

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“Ugh, no. I thought about it, but when I got in the pool for practice, Gale was in there and she was swimming circles around me.”

Sharaka and Aloise laughed, but Daneera frowned. “Literally.”

“Oh,” Aloise said.

OH MY GOD I WANT TO WRITE THIS STORY TOO.

The inevitable race between Gale and Ethal will be fun. :D


@Hot Topic: Very nice! There's something about the way Beryl, and to a lesser extent Aloise, keep asking what's cool and trying to figure out what is and isn't that reminds me of Calvin and Hobbes. I don't remember the specific strip, but I remember Calvin trying to be cool, and Hobbes continually asking about "not cool" things. I really loved the "Smoking in the Girl's Room" comment, and Aloise's certainty that switchblades were definitely not allowed. I think my favorite little moment was when the sprinkler went off and the water turned to steam when it hit Beryl. It reminded me of when the Arbagoth Eight showed up on Kokkinos, and every time a snowflake landed on the shirtless Kahr-ret-Taris, it would melt in a little puff of steam.

Good stuff!

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Not at all. That's where most good ideas come from.

Me.

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@Changing Heart: Ha! I love the clincher. The backstory between her and Dorn is really interesting, too, as is the cruelty of these Rulus twins, whoever they might be. They sound like jerks. Whoever came up with them should be ashamed... :paranoid:

Anyway, thanks for posting! I'm really glad this is creating some material!


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 Post subject: Re: M:EM High School
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...I didn't expect this from you, OL.

I shall get me to a punnery. :)


Hot topic (the story) is fun! I like all the references to the M:EM pieces, especially the fact Jackie can't read Is Trotter around? I can imagine Jackie failing classes she could pass in her sleep just to be with him.

Thanks so much for reading -- and for the kind words! I just loved imagining this scene -- this is the most fun I've had writing in ages. :D

Hrm... that's a good question about Trotter... maybe he's at the local dance academy? I kind of love the idea that he and Jackie were in the same grade together, but Trotter already graduated, while Jackie keeps getting held back. :)


A small piece about Sharaka's adapted backstory. Hope it doesn't sound too weird.
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Oh my God, Huey, I love this piece! Beryl's line about "she seemed almost pleased until I told her I didn’t mean to do it" gave me one of the biggest laughs I've had in ages. :D And I love the sort of story background you're setting up, for Sharaka and Dorn and the Rulus. It simultaneously feels like a real story while also having that quintessential whiff of high school cliquey drama to it.

Thanks so much for sharing this, and I hope we'll get to read more in the future!


I know, right? I have such great ideas.

It is your cross to bear, sir.


Things get interesting when they're all dancing to "Hungry Like the Wolf."

True Fact: Every dance mix I ever made began with either "Rio" or "Hungry Like The Wolf," and ended with whichever song didn't go first. Rio is easily one of my top-10 favorite albums of all time. God, I love that record...


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@Hot Topic: Very nice! There's something about the way Beryl, and to a lesser extent Aloise, keep asking what's cool and trying to figure out what is and isn't that reminds me of Calvin and Hobbes. I don't remember the specific strip, but I remember Calvin trying to be cool, and Hobbes continually asking about "not cool" things. I really loved the "Smoking in the Girl's Room" comment, and Aloise's certainty that switchblades were definitely not allowed. I think my favorite little moment was when the sprinkler went off and the water turned to steam when it hit Beryl. It reminded me of when the Arbagoth Eight showed up on Kokkinos, and every time a snowflake landed on the shirtless Kahr-ret-Taris, it would melt in a little puff of steam.

I totally know the comics you're thinking of -- I think it was more than one strip? I seem to remember that one of them ends with Calvin wearing sunglasses, and Hobbes making some remark to the effect of "who knew that being cool was so much work?" And there's another where Hobbes wears Mickey Mouse pants, insisting that they're cool, while Calvin insists that they are not. So, yeah, that was exactly the vibe I was going for, here. :)

And I love the idea that Jackie is the arbiter of cool for Aloise and Beryl -- she's a senior! She dresses in black! She smokes in the bathroom!

I'm glad you liked the joke about smoking in the bathroom -- that's one of my favorite parts, too, and was one of the things that made me want to write the piece. :) I love how horrified Aloise is about the switchblade, too -- that's against the rules! -- and that Jackie's response is just, "So?" The other mental image that just makes me smile is of Jackie kicking open the door and just casually sauntering back out into the hallway, after setting off the sprinklers. Also, Beryl blushing whenever she says "bitchin'."

(OK, there's a lot that I like about this piece. I can't help it. I had SO MUCH FUN writing this. :D )

I just have such a clear image of high school punk Jackie in my head. Black jeans, black jacket, sunglasses -- looking just a little bit Dylanesque, even -- with a pack of cigarettes rolled-up into one sleeve. I can picture her and Fisco sneaking smoke breaks outside, conversing mostly in grunts and grumbles. I have so much fun imagining her and Aloise and Beryl.


Anyway, thanks so much for reading, Raven, and for the kind words, and for putting together this prompt in the first place. It's just fun, fun, fun. :)


@Changing Heart: Ha! I love the clincher.

It reminds me of yet another song from the 1980s!


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 Post subject: Re: M:EM High School
PostPosted: Wed May 02, 2018 12:00 am 
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I'm amused by the notion that they're perfectly normal students, except that some of them are somehow also nonhuman. Like Sharaka snorting smoke and using a fork in the same sentence. And I love the idea of Beryl blushing on cue.

I should probably get around to posting some of the characters swimming in my story fragments, so they could participate...

Daneera should be able to find something to excel in, though. Track, perhaps? Me, I lettered in chess:

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I don't think I've ever heard the song Rio. Not sure that I'd put it up there with Hungry With the Wolf. I mean, we are talking about two different levels of song here.

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Oh my God, Huey, I love this piece! Beryl's line about "she seemed almost pleased until I told her I didn’t mean to do it" gave me one of the biggest laughs I've had in ages. :D And I love the sort of story background you're setting up, for Sharaka and Dorn and the Rulus. It simultaneously feels like a real story while also having that quintessential whiff of high school cliquey drama to it.

Thanks so much for sharing this, and I hope we'll get to read more in the future!

Thank you! I have no definite idea right now, but I doubt that will be my last contribution to this thread :D

(btw, I love Calvin and Hobbes so much. The fan endings to their story always destroy me)

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@Changing Heart: Ha! I love the clincher.

It reminds me of yet another song from the 1980s!


Except Sharaka wouldn't mind seeing any of her crushes (she has at least three of them at any given moment) on a centerfold :D

Hey, what if it was a literal angel on the centerfold? Too bad I can only think of Diana, and she's not the most suited-
except that she was a demon's slave before meeting Fisco, and considering certain stories from the porn industries...
...I just made myself sad. ****.

Let's change topic, shall we?

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I'm amused by the notion that they're perfectly normal students, except that some of them are somehow also nonhuman. Like Sharaka snorting smoke and using a fork in the same sentence. And I love the idea of Beryl blushing on cue.

Thank you! I think that the well-timed blushing already happened somewhere, maybe in OL's Double Date. And that juxtaposition is what makes AUs so fun, especially when the parallels with the original stories manage to be at the same time obvious and unexpected :D The Homestuck fandom is particularly fond of those.

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Daneera should be able to find something to excel in, though. Track, perhaps?

Good question! To draw a parallel with summoning, she may be the captain of some team; unfortunately while Daneera is skilled in both swimming and wrestling (/close quarters combat), none of those are her speciality, being more of an athletic jack of all trades. (Sharaka too, but her combat focus is much more prominent) I think Raven knows best, but I can come up with some sort of ranks for the kids.
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It only comprises a small part of the sports/kids, so I'm open to suggestions.

@Lunchtime practice games: Very nice! I didn't expect Denner to adopt aggressive playstiles, but as a Delver it makes sense to rush straight to the objective. And the idea of Donagut playing chess is amusing for some reason. And speaking of juxtapositions, a lich teaching chess is an interesting picture all by itself :D

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Raef is an angel... Just saying.

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Raef is an angel... Just saying.

Not completely, from what I remember (with the help of a quick skim) of Legacies? Also, would he be the kind of guy to end up on a centerfold? :D

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Raef is an angel... Just saying.

Not completely, from what I remember (with the help of a quick skim) of Legacies? Also, would he be the kind of guy to end up on a centerfold? :D

It's... Complicated according to the ending of Legacies.
But in response to the other question, Raef is RIPPED.

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It's... Complicated according to the ending of Legacies.

It's a phrase that gets tossed around a lot lately :D
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But in response to the other question, Raef is RIPPED.

Nice to know (and Sharaka would appreciate it) but I meant whether he would let his image end up there: what's his role in this setting?

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I just loved imagining this scene -- this is the most fun I've had writing in ages. :D

I'm really glad people are having fun with this! I've been sitting on this idea for a while, thinking I would write a full story on it some day. I'm glad I dropped a reference to it, and that Huey expressed an interest. Fun stuff so far!

Hrm... that's a good question about Trotter... maybe he's at the local dance academy? I kind of love the idea that he and Jackie were in the same grade together, but Trotter already graduated, while Jackie keeps getting held back. :)

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I totally know the comics you're thinking of -- I think it was more than one strip? I seem to remember that one of them ends with Calvin wearing sunglasses, and Hobbes making some remark to the effect of "who knew that being cool was so much work?" And there's another where Hobbes wears Mickey Mouse pants, insisting that they're cool, while Calvin insists that they are not. So, yeah, that was exactly the vibe I was going for, here. :)

Ahh, yes, I remember the Mickey Mouse pants now that you mention it. Man, do I love Calvin and Hobbes!

I just have such a clear image of high school punk Jackie in my head. Black jeans, black jacket, sunglasses -- looking just a little bit Dylanesque, even -- with a pack of cigarettes rolled-up into one sleeve. I can picture her and Fisco sneaking smoke breaks outside, conversing mostly in grunts and grumbles. I have so much fun imagining her and Aloise and Beryl.

See, now I'm picturing Jackie as a 50s-era high school Biker gang kid, like a female red-eyed James Dean or something. I like it.


@Changing Heart: Ha! I love the clincher.

It reminds me of yet another song from the 1980s!


I feel like I've mentioned this before somewhere, but this song always puts a hilarious image in my head of Fisco Vane, dancing (well, rocking back and forth, really) in his bath robe to this song, singing about Diana.

I might not be a very well man...


@Lunchtime Practice Games: I really like this idea of Denner having the games, the openings, the finishes, all memorized, but not really, truly understanding the game. That just seems perfectly "Denner" to me. Also, for some reason, him calling Donagut "Donny" struck me as very, very funny. I also now have an image of that foreign exchange student, Thomas Cerveau, coming in and messing up the game with his third color!

Thanks for posting!

@Huey's Rankings: I think Chardis could absolutely be the QB and team captain of the Football team. I think that fits his martial prowess well. As for Daneera, I think Track and Field makes a lot of sense for her.


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Yeah, if something were going to bring me back, it was inevitably going to be something like this.

Hey, everyone!

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@Detention: Very nice! I like this exploration of the smoking breaks Orcish alluded to with Jackie and Fisco, and the way the teacher/student relationship mirrors the canon - wait a second...RUWIN! Hey, everyone, Ruwin's here! Hey, welcome back, buddy! Are you back to stay? Did you have a nice vacation? Did you write your book? Did you...- uh, where was I? Oh, yeah, It's cool how like their interactions on Jakkard this is, while still being an interesting high school twist. Daneera's a bit more of a hippie than I usually picture her, but I like it! Fun stuff, Ruwin. Thanks!

Yeah, if something were going to bring me back, it was inevitably going to be something like this.

In that case, I have never done more good for the M:EM than I did by making this thread. :D


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Hey, everyone!

Hey, good to read from you again!

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Daneera's a bit more of a hippie than I usually picture her, but I like it!

To be fair, Daneera has talked about that once in who knows how many years. And probably her ways (I'm picturing her sticking to a Paleo Diet way before it was cool) sound more healthier-than-thou than they're intended.

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"And you are totally her type," Chardis assured him.

Wow. Those two...

Okay, I'm not at Madame du Collet levels of outrage, but man, can they be cruel.

Speaking of whom, we don't have a vice principal yet, do we? And I seem to recall that being the office generally charged with disciplinary actions.

@Lunchtime Practice Games: I really like this idea of Denner having the games, the openings, the finishes, all memorized, but not really, truly understanding the game. That just seems perfectly "Denner" to me. Also, for some reason, him calling Donagut "Donny" struck me as very, very funny. I also now have an image of that foreign exchange student, Thomas Cerveau, coming in and messing up the game with his third color!

The whole thing started with realizing how Denner would try to play, and needing him to lose. I considered Sundar as the opponent, but he'd simply be in a different league; Donagut would have a much more scrappy, fluid style that creates a nice balance and contrast.

I actually have a hexagonal chess board, meant for use by three sides at once. You're right, Thomas would have fun with that, though he'd also be decent at the main game.

@Huey's Rankings: I think Chardis could absolutely be the QB and team captain of the Football team. I think that fits his martial prowess well. As for Daneera, I think Track and Field makes a lot of sense for her.

But Syl on the chess team? I could see her doing well, but she'd be bored too quickly. She needs something with more mind games. Diplomacy, perhaps.

Hey, everyone!
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...She was kind of starting to care.

This line got me. The little niggling of something not quite complete, even if perhaps it shouldn't be. :thumbsup:


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There should be a debate team, I think. Syl would be captain, Tey'von would be on it, the Duchess would be coaching (with Railer helping for dramatic interpretation, of course).

Who else?

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There should be a debate team, I think. Syl would be captain, Tey'von would be on it, the Duchess would be coaching (with Railer helping for dramatic interpretation, of course).

Who else?

Dorn was trained extensively in rhetoric by the Abbots of the Path of the Majestic Storm.

I admit, I didn't need to put that last part. It's just fun to say.

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"And you are totally her type," Chardis assured him.

Wow. Those two...

Okay, I'm not at Madame du Collet levels of outrage, but man, can they be cruel.

Yeah, I wasn't overly comfortable writing that scene for a few different reasons. But there's something about Chardis calling Antine "Bro" that I find absurdly funny.

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Speaking of whom, we don't have a vice principal yet, do we? And I seem to recall that being the office generally charged with disciplinary actions.

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Brentain wrote:
And I love the idea of Beryl blushing on cue.

I make her do that a lot these days. It's just too cute not to. :)


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This is wonderful, Brentain! Thank you so much for sharing!

I am inordinately amused by the idea of Vasilias coaching anything. I just imagine him issuing all his instructions in this bellowing tone of voice, like he has no idea how normal conversations work anymore. "NO, YOU FOOL! NOT THAT PAWN!" And everyone just sort of rolls with it, because, hey, that's just Vasilias! :) I also love that Denner calls Donagut "Donny" -- I especially like it because I sort of can't imagine adult Denner doing that, but it feels like teenage Denner maybe can.

Anyway, again, I love it! Thanks again for sharing!


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I don't think I've ever heard the song Rio. Not sure that I'd put it up there with Hungry With the Wolf. I mean, we are talking about two different levels of song here.

I think we can all agree that "Hungry Like the Wolf" is a stone-cold classic, but I'll put "Rio" right up on the same tier. "Rio" even has a killer 80s saxophone solo to boot. :)

Random "Rio" fact #1: the strange sounds at the start of the track were made by putting metal rods on top of piano strings, and recording the sound they made as they slid around.

Random "Rio" fact #2: "Rio" is one of my absolute favorite Rock Band songs for vox/bass. Duran Duran songs tended to have killer bass parts, with fairly simple guitar riffs -- essentially the opposite of most pop/rock.


I love Calvin and Hobbes so much.

Me too, Huey. Me too. :)


Hey, what if it was a literal angel on the centerfold?

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"Those absssssssssss," Sharaka said, drawing out the "s" without even meaning to.

"You could eat off those abs," Kimberley said.

"I can think of other things I'd rather be eating," Tryst said, her tongue flicking between her lips.

"Tryst!" Kimberley said.

"Oh, please," the devilkin said. "Don't tell me you weren't thinking about it, too."

Kimberley blushed.

"Absssssssssss," Sharaka said.

"And you say he's on the fencing team?" Kahr said, craning his neck for a better view.

"Uh-huh," Tryst said.

"I'm trying out for fencing," Kimberley said.

"Me, too," Kahr said.

"I bet he knows how to handle his sword," Tryst said.

"Tryst!" Kimberley said.

"What?" Tryst said. "Don't tell me you weren't thinking it, too." She coiled her tail around Kimberley's waist. "Because I can tell."

Kimberley blushed redder.

"Absssssssssss," Sharaka said again, oblivious to everyone and everything.

"I'll be taking that."

Miss Endbringer had appeared, as if out of nowhere -- she had an uncanny habit of doing that -- and snatched the magazine from Sharaka's claws. A chorus of frustrated moans erupted from the gathered crowd, only to be silenced by the arching of a single, mismatched eyebrow.

"Material like this is forbidden, as you well know," the science teacher said, holding the magazine high up in the air, above Kimberley's grasping hands. "Besides, I heard the bell ring five minutes ago, and I can feel a wave of detention coming on if certain students don't get themselves to class."

With assorted grumbles and moans, the truant teens made their way off to class.

Mister Venn sauntered over, rolling a rubbish bin alongside with aid of his cane. "I assume you'll be disposing of that garbage?" he said.

Miss Endbringer stuck the magazine in her briefcase. The English teacher cocked his head to one side, and tut-tutted.

"My dear Miss Endbringer," he said, "please don't try to tell me you only read it for the articles."

"I'm keeping it for research," the science teacher said. "I noticed some things which are relevant to my... anatomical interests."

"Oh dear," Mister Venn said.

"Abs," Miss Endbringer said.


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[spoiler]"You totally should," Chardis said with a smirk.

"I...I don't know..." Antine replied.

"Don't be shy," Syl reassured him. "I'm telling you, you're in."

"I mean, she doesn't, you know..."

"Seem to like you?" Chardis asked.

"Or even notice you're alive?" Syl added.

Antine whimpered and hung his head. "Yeah."

"Trust us," Syl said. "We're seniors too, you know."

"And you are totally her type," Chardis assured him.

"I...I am?"

"Yeah," Syl agreed. "Here's a picture of her at prom a few years ago. See the fox she's dancing with?"

Chardis nodded. "You're in, bro. You're in."

Antine took a deep breath, then nodded. "Okay. Okay, I got this."

He didn't move. Finally, after a long wait, Chardis rolled his eyes and gave Antine a little push, starting him down the hall. Once he was out of earshot, the twins turned to one another and smirked.

"She's going to shoot him down so hard," Chardis said.

Syl nodded. "She is a great shot. We've given her enough practice, after all."[/spoiler]

"Hands," a voice said.

Antine -- who had been staring at his feet as though his life depended on it, trying desperately not to step on his partner's boots as they awkwardly two-stepped their way through the first of the slow dances -- realized with a start that the voice was directed at him. Looking up as if he'd been shot, he stammered, "Beg your pardon?"

"Hands," Jackie DeCoeur repeated. "Watch your hands."

Antine blinked in confusion. "I don't--" he started to say.

Jackie DeCoeur grabbed Antine's hands -- which had started to drift down her body -- and directed them firmly back up to her shoulders.

Antine coughed and swallowed. His face felt hot. His throat had gone as dry as the Waste.

"I'm sorry," he stammered. "I didn't--"

"I know you didn't," Jackie DeCoeur said, and smiled. "I'm taller than you, is all."

Antine nodded anxiously in agreement, and the two of them resumed their akward, out-of-sync dancing.

"I'm sorry," Antine said again.

"If it helps," Jackie said, "try to picture that big old globe of Dominaria in the library." Beneath the reflected light of the disco ball, her gold tooth glinted. "If my body is that globe, then your hands stay in the northern hemisphere. You follow?"

Antine gulped again.

"I follow," he said.

"Good," she said. "Then stop squirming and let me lead."

Antine focused on keeping his hands glued to Jackie DeCoeur's shoulders, and he tried to follow her feet.

"One-two," she said to him. "Just follow after me. One-two, one-two, one-two -- there, now you're getting it."

Slowly, his movements and hers fell into rhythm, until the two of them were doing a creditable foxtrot.

"You're good at this," Antine said, trying and failing to hide his surprise.

"I have a good teacher," Jackie DeCoeur said, and grinned.

At the mention of the other fox, Antine's anxiety returned, and he nearly tripped over her feet. It was hot inside the gymnasium, and he was sweating in his rented tux. Jackie DeCoeur was not wearing a dress -- when Antine had asked her about it, the look she had given him could have killed a basilisk -- but she had accepted the corsage he had bought for her, and the spray of red roses wrapped 'round her wrist was the only splash of color on her. Except for her eyes, of course. Those were redder than the roses.

Paper pineapples hung from the ceiling, and all the guests other than Jackie sported fake plastic leis -- the theme for the dance was "A Night in Paradise." One of the juniors on the prom committee had offered Jackie a lei as she entered; Jackie had just lit a cigarette, and ignored the junior's existence. Feeling mortified, Antine had accepted the lei from the stunned-looking junior; he was now wearing both his and hers around his neck.

As the first slow dance song came to an end, the DJ queued-up "Lady in Red."

"Jackie," Antine said, "can I ask you a question?"

"Hands," Jackie DeCoeur said.

Antine blanched, and his distracted hands darted back to her shoulders.

"Shoot," Jackie said.

"Please don't!" Antine said. "I didn't mean it, I swear!"

Jackie rolled her eyes.

"No," she said. "You told me you had a question. So, shoot."

"Oh," Antine said.

"Question?" Jackie said.

"Right," Antine said. They danced back and forth, almost in time to the music. "It's just that, well..."

"It's just that, what?"

"It's just that, I mean, you have a boyfriend, right?"

"Yeah," Jackie said.

"But he's not here?"

"Nope," Jackie said.

"Why not?" Antine said.

"Hands," Jackie said.

Cursing himself beneath his breath, Antine repositioned his hands.

"Trotter doesn't go here anymore," Jackie said, picking up the conversation as though nothing had interrupted. "He graduated two years ago."

"Oh," Antine said.

"I tried to smuggle him in last year," Jackie said, "but we got caught."

"Sorry," Antine said.

"Eh," Jackie said. "We made out in the parking lot. It wasn't all bad."

"Then... uh...," Antine said. "I mean... uh... what I meant to say was... was..."

Jackie raised an eyebrow. "What you meant to say was, why am I here with you?" she said.

"Yeah," Antine said. "That."

Jackie DeCoeur shrugged. "You asked me out, didn't you?" she said.

"Well, yeah," Antine said. "But I didn't know you had a boyfriend when I did!"

Jackie grinned.

"The gruesome twosome over there didn't tell you that, huh?" she said.

Antine darted a quick look over at Syl and Chardis, who were huddled next to the punch bowl, whispering each other. Looking back up at Jackie, Antine shook his head.

"No," he said. "They told me you were single, and that you had a... well, a..."

"A thing for foxes?" Jackie said.

Antine couldn't speak. He just nodded his head.

"Not foxes," Jackie said. "A fox."

Antine's feet had stopped moving. She prodded him in the ribs, and he almost jumped out of his shoes. Slowly, they started dancing again.

"So why did you say yes?" Antine said. "Why did you agree to come to the dance with me?"

"You tell me," Jackie DeCoeur said. "You can see Syl and Chardis from where you are. How do they look?"

Antine glanced back over at the scowling twins.

"Like someone put bitterroot seed in their punch," he said.

"There's your answer," Jackie said.

"Oh," Antine said. Even though part of him had already known this, it still hurt to hear it out loud.

"I'm sorry," Jackie said. "Looking back, I can see this wasn't fair to you. But I hate to see those stuck-up snobs try to get one over, and this seemed like the easiest way to tweak them at their own game."

"I guess," Antine said, shuffling his feet dolefully along with the beat.

"Hands," Jackie DeCoeur said.

"Sorry," Antine said, and started automatically moving his hands upwards, when, to his surprise, Jackie DeCoeur caught hold of his wrists, and started directing them downwards.

"Don't look now," she said, "but the bobbsey twins are watching. This is your one authorized expedition south of the equator, okay?"

Antine swallowed a dry swallow, as Jackie DeCoeur directed his hands to her hips. "Okay," he said.

Jackie pulled him close and spun him, so that he was facing in the direction of the punch bowl.

"The gruesome twosome," she said. "How do they look?"

Antine took a furtive glance. Chardis was squeezing a balloon so hard, it looked as though it would pop, and Syl was kneeding her temples in frustration.

"Not happy," Antine said.

"Good," Jackie DeCoeur said, and, to Antine's shock and suprise, she kissed him once -- quickly -- on the cheek.

Somewhere in the distance, a balloon exploded. Antine barely heard it.

"Won't your boyfriend be upset?" Antine eventually said, holding one paw over the spot where the senior girl had kissed him, in a kind of awed reverie.

Jackie DeCoeur grinned a wicked grin. "I'll make it up to him later," she said. "Plus interest."

"Lucky guy," Antine said, with a bit of a whimper.

"Yeah," Jackie said. "He is." Her grin widened. "But don't worry," she said. "You're a lucky guy, too."

This time, Antine did step on her feet. "What do you mean?" he said.

"See the unicorn, over there?" Jackie said, and she nodded in the direction of Mari Gwynn, who was standing shyly in one corner, and staring resolutely down at her hooved feet.

"Yeah?" Antine said, not understanding.

"Well," Jackie said, "I've been watching her ever since we came in, and, whenever you're not looking in her direction, she doesn't take her eyes off of you."

"She doesn't?" Antine said. "You mean?"

Over the PA system, "Lady in Red" stopped playing. With a jangle of guitars, "Ride a White Swan" started up next.

"Sorry, partner," Jackie said, "but that's my cue. I've got to go see about a fox." Removing Antine's hands from around her waist, she grinned down at him. "In the meantime, though, you just wait here a tick, okay?"

Unsure of what else to do or say, Antine nodded, and, feeling like an idiot, he stood alone on the dancefloor. He could hear the surge of excited chatter from over by the punch bowl as Jackie DeCoeur walked over to where Mari Gwynn stood, and, standing on tip-toe so that she could make herself heard, the black-clad punk whispered something into the unicorn's ear.

Mari Gwynn looked over at Antine, then down at Jackie, then back over at Antine again. Without seeming to mean to, she reared up a bit, and dragged one hoof across the ground, even as she seemed to go red in the face. Then she whispered something to Jackie, who in turn whispered something else back.

Jackie DeCoeur gave the unicorn a pat on the flank, then, after tossing Antine a wink, she turned, and walked away. Mari Gwynn, meanwhile, trotted nervously over to where Antine stood.

"Hi," the unicorn said.

"Hi," Antine said.

"Would you... uh... that is to say..."

Mari Gwynn shook her head in frustration. The gesture sent a ripple through her alabaster mane, and, in that second, Antine wondered how he could possibly have gone for so long without realizing just how beautiful she was.

"Would you like to dance?" a voice said. And it came as a genuine suprise to Antine to realize that the voice was his.

"Yes," Mari Gwynn said, quickly. Then she said it again -- "yes!" -- even more excited this time.

Reaching up, Antine put his arms around Mari Gwynn's neck, and the two of them started to dance. And, from just over the unicorn's broad shoulder, he could see Jackie DeCoeur throwing him a little salute, before she kicked open the door, and slipped out of the gym.


Yeah, if something were going to bring me back, it was inevitably going to be something like this.

Hey, everyone!

Detention

Ruwin, I wish you could see my face right now, because seeing you back again has me grinning the biggest, stupidest grin in the world, and I don't care, because I'm so happy I could burst.

It's good to see you again, friend. It's good to see you again. :D

Also, this is such a beautiful little story, and I'm so glad that you shared it. That moment at the end, where Fisco holds a hard mirror up to Jackie, reminds me so much about why I love both these characters, and why I love seeing them together. There's a weird way in which they need each other, almost, because they can speak in a private language, and they can each see the other without the mask. And of course it's going to end with them sharing a smoke. I doubt they talk much during those detentions. But then talking is never what they've needed from each other. Company, and understanding. It makes me happy just thinking about it.

Thanks so much for sharing, Ruwin. My world is a better place with you in it. :)

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@Foxtrot II, Electric Boogaloo: Ahh, that's adorable. Take that, Rulus! I still feel a little bad for Antine, but it's great that he's got a sweet little filly with an eye for him. And, because everyone's expecting me to make a lewd pun just because Mari's a unicorn and had a horn, here's one: It's great that Antine got leied twice that night!

But I don't know why Jackie and the Dual-Walkers need to be enemies. Jackie likes being friends with Twins, right? :D


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I am inordinately amused by the idea of Vasilias coaching anything. I just imagine him issuing all his instructions in this bellowing tone of voice, like he has no idea how normal conversations work anymore. "NO, YOU FOOL! NOT THAT PAWN!" And everyone just sort of rolls with it, because, hey, that's just Vasilias! :)

That's great :D

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It's a bit uncharacteristic of Sharaka to be speechless like that, thought it may be for the better since she'd join Tryst in the deluge of double entendres, poor Kimberley. Maybe Sharaka had already practiced with Raef but she didn't assume he was that ripped since he usually wears baggy or otherwise unflattering clothes? That surprise would make sense then.

Tu quoque, Miss Endbringer? "Oh dear" indeed.

The idea of Mari and Antine dancing is both hella funny and endearing, thumbs up for Jackie :D

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Aaarrrgh wrote:
There should be a debate team, I think. Syl would be captain, Tey'von would be on it, the Duchess would be coaching (with Railer helping for dramatic interpretation, of course).
You're right; that's perfect for Syl. And I feel foolish for not having thought of it, considering that we've been wondering whether our little Liliana would enjoy debate.

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Who else?

Aurelie. And she's dragged Henri into it against his will, but he turns out to be really good when he doesn't overthink it.

I also love that Denner calls Donagut "Donny" -- I especially like it because I sort of can't imagine adult Denner doing that, but it feels like teenage Denner maybe can.

I know, right? It kind of popped out, and I was second-guessing for a while, but it's so very high school. I have the feeling that he mostly does that because that's how Donagut was first introduced to him.

"Shoot," Jackie said.

"Please don't!" Antine said. "I didn't mean it, I swear!"

:applause: I love that this works so well here, and still feels like it could actually happen in canon.

"See the unicorn, over there?" Jackie said, and she nodded in the direction of Mari Gwynn, who was standing shyly in one corner, and staring resolutely down at her hooved feet.

Oh, that's so sweet! And with that, Jackie has not only managed to one-up the class bullies, but lift up their target to new heights. Thank you so much!

Meanwhile, it appears that Antine might be better off trying a ballroom position, but that might feel odd in the type of high school dances I was never able to attend.


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